英语强人都过来,帮忙找错误,Hello,everyone.Today my topic is my dream.My dream is go to stray alone.Then I can sleep in the tent,eat the wild fruit,and to feel the nature's fresh air.Tell the truth,i don't have the ability to make my dream

英语强人都过来,帮忙找错误,Hello,everyone.Today my topic is my dream.My dream is go to stray alone.Then I can sleep in the tent,eat the wild fruit,and to feel the nature's fresh air.Tell the truth,i don't have the ability to make my dream
英语强人都过来,帮忙找错误,
Hello,everyone.Today my topic is my dream.My dream is go to stray alone.Then I can sleep in the tent,eat the wild fruit,and to feel the nature's fresh air.Tell the truth,i don't have the ability to make my dream come true now.So I have two goals now
One is to make enough money,the other is growth.That's all,thanks.
帮忙找语法上嘚错误,最好带翻译,

英语强人都过来,帮忙找错误,Hello,everyone.Today my topic is my dream.My dream is go to stray alone.Then I can sleep in the tent,eat the wild fruit,and to feel the nature's fresh air.Tell the truth,i don't have the ability to make my dream
大家好,今天我的题目是我的梦想.我的梦想是独自一人去漂泊,在帐篷里面睡觉,吃野果,感受大自然新鲜的空气.说实话,我现在没有能力实现它,所以现在我有两个目标,一个是赚足够多的钱,另一个就是长大,我期待梦想成真的那一天,所以我会向着这两个目标努力!
就这些,
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Hello,everyone!
Today my topic is my dream.
My dream is going to stray alone.I can sleep in the tent in the night,and eat the wild fruit,I can enjoy fresh air of the nature.To tell the truth,i don't have the ability to realize my dream now.So I have two goals for this moment.
One is to making enough money,the other is growing up.I am looking for my dream coming true so that I will be making great efforts for the two goals.
That's all,thanks.

Hello,everyone.Today my topic is about my dream.My dream is go to stray alone.Then I can sleep in the tent,eat wild fruit,and breathe the fresh air.Tell the truth，i don't have the ability to make my d...

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Hello,everyone.Today my topic is about my dream.My dream is go to stray alone.Then I can sleep in the tent,eat wild fruit,and breathe the fresh air.Tell the truth，i don't have the ability to make my dream come true now.So I have two goals now
One is to earn enough money,another one is growth.That's all,thanks.
大家好.今天我的话题是关于我的梦想.我的梦想是独自一人呆在外面.这样我可以睡在帐篷里,吃野果,呼吸大自然清新的空气.说实话,我没有能力让这些实现.所以我有两个目标,一是赚足够多的钱,另外一个是长大.就是这些,谢谢

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my dream is (to) go to stray alone
(To) tell (you ) the truth
the other is (to grow up)

1.today's；第二句中today后加’s
2.My dream is to go to；第三句中，is后面加to
3.and feel the nature's fresh air；把原句中的to去掉；
4.the other is to growth 在is后面加to
（应该就这些，给分吧！）

好, everyone.Today 我的题目是我的dream.My 梦想是去迷路我能睡觉在帐篷的alone.Then, 吃狂放的果子, 和感觉nature's 新鲜的air.Tell 真相，i don't 有能力做我的梦想来我现在有二个目标的真实的now.So
你将挣足够的金钱, 其他是growth.That's 全部, 感谢。
没翻译的是不对地.....

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好, everyone.Today 我的题目是我的dream.My 梦想是去迷路我能睡觉在帐篷的alone.Then, 吃狂放的果子, 和感觉nature's 新鲜的air.Tell 真相，i don't 有能力做我的梦想来我现在有二个目标的真实的now.So
你将挣足够的金钱, 其他是growth.That's 全部, 感谢。
没翻译的是不对地..

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Hello,everyone.
Today my topic is my dream.改为 The theme today I will talk to you in the lecture is about my dream.
My dream is to go straying and travelling alone.Then I can sleep in the tent,...

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Hello,everyone.
Today my topic is my dream.改为 The theme today I will talk to you in the lecture is about my dream.
My dream is to go straying and travelling alone.Then I can sleep in the tent,eat wild fruits,and make friend with nature. Sometimes it sounds amazing and interest! But acturally，I don't get enough capability to work out of my dream.
So I really regard that I have two goals to reach from now on:
The one is to earn enough money,another is growing healthy.
That's all,thanks.
语法就这样了，但是我觉得你对于梦想的实现过程太轻描淡写了。我想你还是学生吧，要做的事不应该第一个就是赚钱，而是好好学习知识。并且通过这个事还可以展开哦！
而且我觉得你的这个“野外生存计划”应该属于爱好或者嗜好，而不是梦想。这个主题有点大也！

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